It's a story that seemed right somehow, some AUs seem unlikely to me and it's a stretch to see the guys in that setting. Your story had no such problems. I loved Joey's shop, I want to go to Joey's shop.
There were details in the story that were understated yet still showed so much, like this JC’s the one with the hair, they work shifts at KX50,” Joey took a breath, “and Mrs. Morrison’s convinced they’re a couple.”
“Really? What makes her so sure?”
“Something about a piggyback and twirling.”
I can see this so easily, I imagine Chris on JC's back as they twirl in place and it's just the most delightful image. And this.
Chris was short. That was the first thing Joey noticed about him. Compared to Joey, he was really short. His black hair spiked up in a million different directions, he had a goatee that appeared to have two…horns, there was a light sheen of sweat across his upper lip and beside his sideburns, his black t-shirt said ‘real live action hero’, and he had an attitude that radiated beyond his size. Joey wanted lick the side of his face and then fuck him senseless.
Man, that's just Chris. If I didn't already I'd want to fuck him senseless myself just from that description.
The plot was lovely and was paced well, you had me so tense at the end thinking that Joey was going to lose the shop, then Chris sold his albums. Man, I had the sniffles then for sure.
I really loved that story a lot.
As for my most recent file. I think you mean my Word files, if not, sorry. This is what I have for the honey challenge so far, pathetic yeah.
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It's a story that seemed right somehow, some AUs seem unlikely to me and it's a stretch to see the guys in that setting. Your story had no such problems. I loved Joey's shop, I want to go to Joey's shop.
There were details in the story that were understated yet still showed so much, like this JC’s the one with the hair, they work shifts at KX50,” Joey took a breath, “and Mrs. Morrison’s convinced they’re a couple.”
“Really? What makes her so sure?”
“Something about a piggyback and twirling.”
I can see this so easily, I imagine Chris on JC's back as they twirl in place and it's just the most delightful image. And this.
Chris was short. That was the first thing Joey noticed about him. Compared to Joey, he was really short. His black hair spiked up in a million different directions, he had a goatee that appeared to have two…horns, there was a light sheen of sweat across his upper lip and beside his sideburns, his black t-shirt said ‘real live action hero’, and he had an attitude that radiated beyond his size. Joey wanted lick the side of his face and then fuck him senseless.
Man, that's just Chris. If I didn't already I'd want to fuck him senseless myself just from that description.
The plot was lovely and was paced well, you had me so tense at the end thinking that Joey was going to lose the shop, then Chris sold his albums. Man, I had the sniffles then for sure.
I really loved that story a lot.
As for my most recent file. I think you mean my Word files, if not, sorry. This is what I have for the honey challenge so far, pathetic yeah.