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Part 4 of homeless AU

Again, WIP, read at own risk. Things will change in final version and there'll be mistakes and Brit saying and all sorts of funky things.

This part is sort of sad, it gets better soon -- I hope.

There's also an info dump I'm really worried about.

Previous parts linked behind the cut.

Part 1 is here

Part 2 is here

Part 3 is here

The café’s looks empty when they walk in, but Chris can hear Sally singing in the kitchen and the smell of bacon wafts through the air.

“Hey, Sally. It’s us.” Joey shouts as he carefully places his bag on a table before moving to the counter. Chris makes sure the kids have sat down before joining Joey, leaning over the counter so he can peer into the kitchen. Sally is cutting buns as slices of bacon sizzle in huge pans and Chris hears Joey’s stomach gurgle, then laughs as his own does the same.

“You lot back again?” Sally says as she flips bacon, she sounds annoyed but Chris knows better so he grins at her when she looks their way to scowl.

“We come to see you, beautiful. You know that.” Joey lays it on thick and Chris waits for Sally to respond, the same way she’s done for the last eighteen months. She doesn’t disappoint, flipping Joey off with one hand while turning bacon with the other. Joey hams it up, expression sorrowful, clutching at his heart as JC laughs from behind them.

“You want the usual?” Sally questions as she layers bacon on three buns.

“We need two more today.” Chris replies, then looks at Justin and Lance who’re whispering together at the table. “Bacon sandwiches okay for you?”

Justin looks up and nods, he looks miserable, pressed close to Lance and Chris wishes he didn’t have to make them talk.

“Being picking up strays again?” Sally is standing at the counter, full plate in her hand. Joey takes it and goes to their table and Chris watches as Justin and Lance cram the sandwiches in their mouths, taking huge bites despite the hot bacon. “They’re babies, Chris.”

“I know, that’s why they’re with me.” Chris turns and looks at Sally, fingers tapping against the counter as she stares at him.

“You couldn’t have taken them to a shelter? Or the police? Does it always have to be you?” Sally sighs and places her hand over Chris’. “You can’t save everyone, honey. I wish you’d learn that.”

“I know.” Chris fights the urge to pull his hand from under Sally’s. She’s a close friend, has been for the last few years. But he hates the way she looks at him, like he’s something fragile. Because he’s not, never has been.

“If you say so.” Sally looks unconvinced, but lets him free anyway. “Come and introduce me then, before the starving hordes descend.”

Chris gives Sally a look -- he hates unfinished conversations -- but lets it go. Walking to their table he waits for Sally to come over then points at Justin. “Justin. This is Sally, she makes the best bacon sandwiches in the world and I’m going to marry her when I grow up.”

Justin gulps down the food he has in his mouth and wipes his fingers on his pants before standing and offering his hand. “Pleased to meet you, ma’am.” Sally grins and ignores his hand, kissing his cheek instead.

“Hi, honey. No need to stand on ceremony in here, and don’t listen to this goofball. Why would he want a fat old lady when he has this pretty thing?” Sally ruffles JC’s hair making him blush before turning to Lance. “And who’s this cute little thing, Chris?”

Lance flushes bright red as he stands, dropping the remains of his sandwich on the plate. He brings his hand up then drops it, clearly unsure what to do so Sally kisses his quickly as Chris says. “That’s Lance. He has great shampoo.”

Sally looks at Chris then ignores him, concentrating on Lance. “Hey, honey. Sit, eat up. I have to go get drinks anyway. You want milk?”

She’s addressing Justin and Chris grins as Justin forces back his usual I’m not a kid comment before replying. “Sure.”

Lance asks for milk too so Sally promises to bring them over then pushes Chris toward a chair. “Sit already and eat. I’ll get the drinks, you all want black coffee I suppose.”

They nod so Sally leaves and Chris reaches for his sandwich, the only one left on the plate. It’s hot and delicious and he forces himself to savour every mouthful, knowing Sally won’t be working the morning shift again for two days. Justin is whispering to Lance again, face pale as he fidgets with the plastic tomato sauce bottle that’s usually in the middle of the table. JC is drawing on a napkin, using gentle pencil strokes to capture Joey’s likeness as he chews his sandwich.

The silence is edged with tension and Chris knows he’ll have to start this conversation, so he swallows the last of his bacon and turns so he’s facing Lance and Justin. “You going to tell us now?”

Justin’s hand squeezes the bottle and a blob of sauce dribbles down his hand. JC offers the napkin with Joey’s face on it and Justin uses it to wipe away the sauce, crumpling it up and dropping it onto the empty plate after. He stays silent, mouth opening and closing a few times, then Lance places his hand on Justin’s arm. Lance closes his eyes, opens them then takes a deep breathe.

“It’s my story to tell really. My fault that we’re here.”

Justin protests at that but Lance turns to him, placing a gentle hand against Justin’s lips. “Let me tell it my way, okay?”

Justin nods so Lance drops his hand. “I’m from this small town, you know the kind where everyone knows everyone else? I wasn’t part of the popular crowd, but I was happy. My home life was great, I had good friends, I was in the choir and rode most days.” Lance smiles and Chris imagines Lance’s home, somewhere happy and comfortable. Justin has hold of Lance’s hand now, pressing it hard against his own and Chris gets a sick feeling in his belly, he doesn’t want to hear what’s coming. “There was only one problem. I didn’t want any of the girls that asked me to dances, I wanted their boyfriends. Not that I told anyone, I wasn’t stupid.”

JC makes a soft sound of support, Chris knows he understands, the same way he does. Lance looks up and flashes a quick smile in JC’s direction, then keeps talking. “I met Justin this summer. His mom had rented a house and we met at the local mall. I was looking for a shirt and he walked up behind me and said my taste sucked then pushed this other shirt in my hand.”

“I was right though.” Justin interrupts, and Lance nods while smiling. “Yeah, you were right as usual. I asked him what a kid like him knew about fashion and he said more than a hick like me did. We sort of glared for a while then he smiled, told me to put back the shirt and we were going for milkshakes. That was the start of the best summer of my life. We talked every day and went to movies, then one day he…” Lance stops talking, looking round the table. “You do know we’re together, right?”

They all nod so Lance goes on. “One day Justin kissed me. I pushed him away, because, hello he’s younger than me and we’d never mentioned the boy thing. But he’s persistent and we ended up together.”

“That’s wonderful,” JC says with a smile and Chris can tell Joey agrees. But there’s more to this story, the way Lance is starting to shake shows that.

“We fooled around a lot and I guess we got careless one day. One of my momma’s friends saw us kissing in the field where I kept my horse. She told my momma and by the time I got home momma and dad were waiting for me. I’ve never seen them so disappointed. They kept saying I’d lied to them, but I hadn’t. I’d just not told them everything. But they kept saying I’d lied and how disappointed they were. They told me to go to my room and my momma hugged me and said she loved me but she needed time.”

Lance falls silent when Sally places glasses of milk on the table then takes a long drink while Joey pours three cups of coffee.

“I needed to talk to someone, so late that night I climbed out my window and went to Justin’s. We talked some and he hugged me until I felt a little better. It was dark by then and I knew I had to go home, so I kissed him goodbye and went down the road I’d walked down a thousand times before.”

Chris grips his coffee cup in a brutal grip when Lance stops talking. Lance is obviously shaking now and Justin takes the milk from his hand when it splashes over the side. Chris is about to tell him it’s okay, they don’t need to know when Lance talks again.

“They were waiting by the big oak tree. My momma’s friend’s boy and his friends – my friends. We’d been friends for years, from kindergarten for some so I didn’t worry about walking past. I didn’t even get to say hello before they hit me. “JC murmurs oh baby but Lance keeps talking, voice flat and expressionless. “I can’t remember most of what happened. Just flashes. Jimmy from choir spitting in my face as he lifted a stick above his head. Amber, the girl I ate lunch with pulling at my hair. My dad found me later, lying in the ditch. They’d torn off my clothes and left a sign saying This is what happens to fags.. My friends did that. Dad carried me home and I stayed in bed for days. Momma wanted me to go to hospital but I said no, all I wanted was Justin.”

“They didn’t even tell me.” Justin spits out. “My mom found out at the store when they were talking about the Bass boy who’d got what he deserved. She told them they were homophobic assholes and dumped her shopping on the counter. She tried to phone Lance but his mom wouldn’t talk. I had to climb in his window one night.”

Justin wipes an unsteady hand across his eyes, attention totally on Lance. “We talked all night, whispering in his bed. We decided the only thing we could do was run away.”

“So you just up and ran away?” Joey questions and Justin whirls on him.

“What else could we do? Wait until they killed him next time? Or should he have stayed there and listened to what a disappointment he was and read the bible that appeared on his bed? It was all we could do.”

“Calm down,” Lance says. He pulls Justin close to him, holding him tight as Justin shakes with anger. “He’s only asking questions, it’s okay.”

They all stay quiet, looking away as Lance mops tears from Justin’s face with his sleeve. Even Sally’s stopped singing and the silence is suffocating. Chris reaches for JC’s hand under the table, holding it as Justin looks up.

“I’m sorry. It just makes me mad.” Justin apologises.

“I had to leave.” Lance says. “They kept phoning when Momma went out. They said they’d kill my sister and burn down my house. I wasn’t going to put my family in danger for something I did. Justin wasn’t supposed to come, but he insisted and I wasn’t strong enough to say no. I never am, if I was strong I’d be at home facing them not here.”

You’re alive aren’t you?” Chris says, and he fixes Lance with a look. “You’re here and you’ve kept on going. You’re strong.” It’s your mom and dad that’s the weak ones.”

“No.” Lance protests. “You don’t understand, they were trying. Momma said she hated what I was doing but I was still her son. She wanted what was best for me, a wife and family like all the people in our town. I love my family, look.”

Lance bends and pulls his suitcase from under the next table. He unzips it and folds back the top. Chris can see clothes inside, a damp towel and the stuff Lance used to wash. But Lance pushes them aside and Chris sees a pile of books and photographs mixed with hand written notes.

“This is my family.” Lance pulls one of the books free and opens the first page. It’s a photo-album and Chris looks at a picture of a younger Lance with a woman who has to be his mom. She has her hands resting on Lance’s shoulders and a man has his arm round her back. A girl is next to Lance and they all grin into the camera, looking happy and sun warm. “They love me. You have to believe that, but I couldn’t stay.”

Lance gently touches the page, fingers ghosting over his family before he shuts the book with a snap, pushing it back in his case.

“What about your mom?” JC asks Justin, and he flushes, dipping his head.

“I left her a note, said I was going to my dad’s for a while.” Justin looks ashamed for a moment then looks up, expression defiant. “I wasn’t going to let him leave on his own. I love him.”

Chris bites back a comment about how can he know love when he’s so young. Then looks at Justin. “How old are you anyway?”

“Sixteen.” Justin says and Chris keeps on staring until Justin caves. “Okay, I’m fifteen alright? I’m still not leaving him.”

“Fifteen. Fuck.” Chris feels like beating his head against the table but looks at Lance. “Tell me you’re legal at least.”

Lance looks away and Chris knows it’s bad news. “I’m eighteen but I’m not going back.” Lance sounds defiant and Chris knows he’s in trouble and sinking fast, because no way can he send Lance back now.

“Neither am I.” Justin looks just as defiant and Chris knows he’s lost that battle too, at least for now. Justin needs to go home and maybe take Lance with him.

“You can stay.” Chris says, and he can sense the relief round the table then feels the sloppy kiss against his cheek when Justin jumps up and hugs him, all long limbs and soft skin. Justin clings for a moment then hugs Lance, Chris sees JC and Joey looking at him with expressions of support and Sally shaking her head from behind the counter. Sometimes, he thinks, it’s not worth getting up in the morning.

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Oh, Lance. And Justin, he's fifteen, they're just babies. Please make it all better, please.
*hugs*

I know. Poor babies *cuddles them close*

They will get better -- eventually.

Thanks again for the comment, hon.

**sighs softly** It'll all end well, right? Record contracts and art shows and a pretty penthouse? **clings to the idea** they're teeny tiny babies. And Joey and Sally are just adorable. Chris breaks my heart, and JC is so good to him. You're managing to mix sexy scenes with emotionally wrecking ones. you exceed your awesomeness only by your ability to rule. (I think I may have seen 'Finding Nemo' too many times lol I'm turning into the surf turtle Crush lol)
Love them, love you, more please?

Of course it'll end well. They'll be happy and successful and everything will be right with the world.

I'm glad you liked this part because I was worried about it. It's a big info dump and I didn't know if I was getting too dark. I'm trying to think of something fun they can do that costs nothing. Of course having an orgy was the first thought in my mind, but I had to rule that out :(

Surf turtle crush, lol you're awesome :)

More tomorrow. Tune in when the babies go with Chris busking. Will Justin push Chris to the back and take over? Will Lance do the Lance dance and not be heard all day? Tune in to find out! ;)

Thanks as usual for your comments. You rock!

*snort giggles* just the idea of Lance doing the Lance dance in an effort to busk and Justin taking over singing duties lol

And personally, I'd put my vote in for an orgy that's free and a good time lol But yes, maybe playing on the swings in the park or... sneaking into an electronics store or dancing in the aisles of walmart would be better lol Watch me suck as ideas *g*

No, no, you rock lol You're putting me and my big gay burger au to shame, if only because of the volume and quality of what you've got here lol I'm glad you're on a writing kick hon :o) There's no feeling like it *g*

Oh you know Justin would want to sing, and hey, I'd pay a few pennies to see the Lance dance, and if he'd turn and show the Bass Ass I'd pay a lot more ;)

I love the park idea, it's just the thing Justin would scoff at while JC's all connecting with the sky as he flies in the air on a swing and Joey could talk to Lance at the top of the climbing frame as Chris bets Justin that he can't twirl over the bars. They need fun damn it!

I don't know about putting people to shame. I'm winging this totally and I'm amazed that anyone's reading. You take your time with the burger AU and make sure it's good. I just churn stuff out. But I have to admit it feels great being on a writing kick, I just hope it lasts.

lol I'd pay a helluva lot more to see the Bass Ass lol

lol Aaaw, see, that sounds adorable, perfect even *g* They do need fun!

lol Well, churning it out though you may be, it's still fantastic :o) the world needs more well written AUs, yes they do :o)

I'm glad you liked this part because I was worried about it. It's a big info dump and I didn't know if I was getting too dark. I'm trying to think of something fun they can do that costs nothing. Of course having an orgy was the first thought in my mind, but I had to rule that out :(

How about something along the lines of a circus coming to town or something? Or a fair? Something that can be supported by the community and is free to anyone who wants to go? Just an idea!

BTW, I found this story via [Unknown site tag]. I'm loving it so far even though it's really sad. =\ I'm friending you, I hope you don't mind! =)

krabbypatty

Hey, I'll take any ideas people can give. And I love the idea of a fair. You know what? I've a tentative plot for this and a fair would fit in so perfectly for an idea I have. Thank you :)

I'm glad you're enjoying the story, it is sad but I think there'll be two days worth of happyish posts before it goes dark again.

And of course I don't mind you friending me!

Thank you so much for commenting.

Oh. Oh my. Yeah, tears in my eyes here. I'm broken. The babies are broken. but lance's family loves him. *meep*

Hun, you are doing such a good job with this story. Like, I can't even put into words right now how much I love this story. Maybe later when I can think right.

but they can stay. !!! Can I hug them? and Chris? And give JC some nice pencils/pens? And Joey ...something, anything, as long as he smiles?

They do love him, and I'm glad you saw that because I had a feeling I'd failed and Diane had came across as an ass when all she was is shocked.

I'm so glad you're still liking this, honestly when I answered your ficlet request I never thought it would expand like this, but I'm so glad it has because I'm having a blast writing it.

But yes, they can stay and of course you can hug them! *Sends the lambs and Chris to you in a box then hands JC art supplies and makes Joey smile*

Poor Lance, but I hope it's going to work out for them.

I know. I'm being mean to him :(

But it will work out -- eventually.

Thanks for the comment, hon.

Justin needs to pet Lance better. Happy thoughts.

And I can't help but picture Sally Struthers as Sally, she's feeding the hungry kids, ya know.

Info dump works well, it helped let us know their story. Why, oh why, didn't they go to Justin's mom???

Justin needs to pet Lance better. Happy thoughts.

Yes, he really does.

I love that you see my OC as someone, I had to google Sally Struthers but to be honest I'm still no further forward *g*

I'll admit this to you too. I didn't even think of them going to Justin's mom. The way I was thinking about it was Lance panicked about his family being in the firing line, he's young and stressed about everything and decides to run. Justin being Justin says not without him and off they go.

They should have gone to Lynn, I'm seriously thinking whether I need to add something to explain that when I edit this.

Thanks again for your comments and hanging in to read this :)

Don't change it, they obviously weren't able to think straight about the situation, Lance was severely hurt and getting threats. I doubt anyone would thing clearly in a situation like that, let alone teenage guys.

Although Lynn must be a basket case right now if they didn't leave a note or something.

And Sally Struthers played the daughter on "All in The Family", a blnde. liberal almost bimbo. She has, in recent years, been reduced to the infomercials that talk about how "60 cents a day can savethe life of a child in a poverty stricken country." With pictures of waifs with big eyes in hovels. Meanwhile, she became rather large, the juxtaposition was always amusing to me. The obviously overfed asking for donations to feed the underfed.

Thanks again for your thoughts, I've decided to leave the story as it is, maybe just adding something about leaving Lynn a note or a phone call.

Ah, I see about Sally Struthers now, thanks for explaining.

Wow, this story is. just. amazing. So harsh and sad, but it has these poignant, beautiful moments that just make me smile. I can't wait to read more of it.

I added you to my friends list so I can get updates and such :)

Wow, thank you.

I'm glad you're seeing the beautiful moments, because it is sad but I want to show there's light too.

Thank you so much for the comments and welcome to my friends list :)

Terri....

*sighs and shakes head sadly*

I have no idea why you doubt yourself, HOW you can doubt yourself when you produce work like this. It really, really =IS= that good, please trust me on this. And I'm sorry I haven't sent beta-email yet; I'm slightly busy, I'll send it just as soon as I get the one you said you owe me... *sly!wink*

And I have to second Lincoln's question, why not go to Lynn? It's a plot-point that needs to be answered, but it has huge potential to spring off into so much more... I also agree the info dump was just fine. The lambs left out a few details that might've confused the guys, but it was perfect for the already-established reader.

I'll always doubt myself, that won't change now. Lol, you'll get your mail, you know you just have to keep prodding me to actually send it.

I was so worried about the info dump, so I'm glad it worked for you. I figured the lambs wouldn't tell everything, I mean who does when you're having a serious conversation. You always forget something. At least I do, before you tell me you never do ;)

Why not go to Lynn? The way I saw it it happened too fast. Lance was attacked, lay in bed recovering for a while wanting Justin. Justin finds out, they talk and Lance is panicking because his family is being threatened. They're kids and don't think and he decides to take off on the spur of the moment. He didn't want Justin to come, but Justin is Justin and came anyway.

However, I do have to admit I didn't think about Lynn as I was writing. Which means I have to have a good think about using her now.

Thanks, hon. I know you're always honest so I look forward to your comments.

*whimpers*

It's so sad, but still I adore this story and cannot wait to read more of it.

You've done a lovely job and made it easy to care about what happens to them. *sigh*

Oh, I'm sorry :(

It is sad, but there's happy times coming -- for a little bit at least -- very soon.

Thank you again for your comments :)

Okee. Happy times are acoming.

are they here yet?

are they here yet?

They are *g*

Next part is up :)

Thanks, hon.

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*twirls*

WHEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

*scampers off to read*

LOL.

Hey, btw sorry for all the comments that came your way. LJ kept telling me that your journal wasn't recognised then when I looked there was about 4 comments the same *blush*

Also, I answered you using Josh's name earlier, because I'm stupid and forgot to log out of there when I'd done something for him.

*Blushes again*

That's ok. I figured it was just LJ being it's normally freaky self.

I'm reading the new part now. Which is going slow since I'm also IMing with my sister at the same time. lol.

I'm friending your journal, btw. :D

You make my day sometimes you know? The story was good. I like that Chris is known for picking up strays and taking care of people because it's a great thing. JC's hair... mmmm... I love JC's hair. I forgot to mention that over the last few parts. Hee hee.

I have a question for you though. I see a lot of fic where Lance's mom and dad are kind of supportive but not neccessarily accepting, while Justin's mom is alway supportive. Was there some sort of canon thing that supports that for you and your story? Or just a general, OK... who's gonna have the bad part of the story? No criticizing at all. I just get curious when I read stuff. Especially when there's a lot of the same type stuff. The Lance's mom being unsupportive and Justin's mom is all PFLAG the second it's out of his mouth seems to be a big theme or like Chris being uncircumcised... that kills me and I can't find any proof.

Thank you :)

I'm glad you like JC's hair ;)

Hey, no problem with the questions.

I had Lance's mom and dad not so supportive because I needed a reason for Lance to leave home. And in this case I decided on his mom not understanding then him fearing for his families safety. I think it might be one of the things that I change at the end because a lot of people picked up on it. There's no reason I think Diane would be homophobic ( If you remember in my last story she didn't give a damn that Chris was having sex, just that he was keeping them awake ) It's just in this case I needed Lance all off kilter so he runs away from, instead of to his family.

In terms of Lynn, she's so tight with Justin that I can't imagine her being anything but supportive to him. However, in RL I imagine Diane is the same with Lance, so I'm contradicting myself.

In the story you have to remember that Justin may not have told his mom, she could have got pissed because it's one of Justin's friends being dissed. I'd like to think my friends mom would stick up for me.

Thanks for making me think, hon :)

I was just curious really if there was something on the fandom that made you choose that. And yeah, I do remember that about your other story. And I just forgot what else I was going to ask you. Oldtimers... it'll kill ya.

Oh yeah, do we get to hear Chris' story??? and JC's??? I'm all ashiver with the possibilities.

No problem, I like the questions. It shows me that people are actually reading this thing *g*

You will get to hear all the stories eventually, I know JC's and Chris' I just have to think of something for Joey now.

Hmmm, I wonder how alcoholic!Joey would go down? He had a problem but dried out. Not sure yet, I'll have to think more.

You ask great questions :)

OOH, I like the alcohol part... recovered obviously. But yeah. That works into the vice.

*whimpers* The poor boys!

I know *hugs them hard*

I hope you're doing better today as well, hon.

I'm doing marvy-poo. *grin* Though I need to go drop off rent.

That's great.

It's about time you had some good days :)

agreeing with the comments above - why didn't they go to Diane? I can just see her facing up to Lance's parents and trying to make them face up and front to the issue, press charges and all.

One tiny little phrasing thing that stuck out at me - Lance saying 'I wasn’t stupid'. 'I'm not stupid' sounds a lot more natural to my ear, unless he's very sure that he's currently being an idiot, which he doesn't seem to - although landing himself and Justin in their current situation [in my head Lance balme himself] he might.

Also? Adore Chris!voice and Chris and Joey taking care of the others. **adoration**

You know, having them go to Lynn's is something that didn't cross my mind. I was thinking in terms of Lance panicking, knowing his family may be in danger and wanting to leave *now*. Then Justin not willing to let him go alone. I'm keeping all these comments in a file because it's something I'll change when I edit/change things at the end. At the moment I'm not sure how to address the Lynn thing. Maybe Lance having a conversation with someone explaining how everything happened in a blur and he ran. Really not sure.

Thanks for the phrasing thing, I'll change that now, because I agree with you when I looked it over. I'm using these comments as a sort of alpha read through which may be a bit cheeky but it's working for me *g*

I'm glad you love Chris!voice. I worry about capturing him because it's so easy to either fall into the clown side or go too angsty. I think he's somewhere in the middle, and I need to bring out his fun side soon.

Thanks for your comments :)

possibly some of this ties into the time sense? Becuase I got the impression fro Lance that he was beat up and spent sdeveral days in bed at home before Justin managed to find out and sneak in and then several hours of talking and planning and then they make their run for it, and then - how long since they left home to Chris picking them up? Because Lance hasn't seemed particularly *injured* at least physically.

And I was hoping you were ok with the comments / wurstions / crit - everything I post on ephemera_tales is essentially still work in progress so I'm always happy to think about changing things, but not everyone works that way.

Yeah, there is a period of time between everything happening, in fact it's exactly as you say. He's beaten up, comes home and wants Justin but at that point his parents are blaming Justin for what happens. So Justin finds out days later, sneaks into Lance's room where they talk. About the calls etc and they're young and everything's happening at once and they decide to just go. I see Lance throwing stuff in his case and heading to the bus station with Justin following saying something like, if you go I'm coming too, and he does.

I think one thing I may have failed on is showing that Diane isn't homophobic as such, just shocked and bewildered. Lance has always been this perfect son then one of her friends comes and says 'hey, I've just seen Lance making out with that Timberlake boy' She's angry that he didn't say anything and disappointed but at no point does she stop loving him.

I'd really rather get crit now than later when this is posted and done. I'm not the best writer in the world and I make mistakes and get things wrong and they do need changed. I don't understand anyone that gets annoyed at people trying to help them. No I'm good with comments like that, as long as people remember is is a WIP and as such not polished.

Damn those small towns! Your characterizations of all the boys are so realistic for AU. My heart absolutely broke for Lance laying in a ditch somewhere all battered and bruised. *sniffle*

I adore Chris and how he wants to take care of everyone, but it's JC's--I'm up to part 7 and consolidating my comments here--vulnerability that just makes my heart break all over again.

I'm so glad I decided to venture into this WIP, cuz yeah, I normally avoid them like the plague. Just brilliant, so far.

Thank you. I think that one of the most important things to get right, characterisation and I'm thrilled you think I'm doing okay.

I love Chris too, and JC. Though this started as a lambs story and I really need to focus on them again.

Thank you for taking a chance on my story, and for taking the time to comment :)

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