Date: 2006-11-06 04:11 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] msktrnanny.livejournal.com
Wheee! I thought maybe they'd get to see the teenie, but leave it to you to work in Kevin/Chris. lol

You have a couple of minor typos:

wings wide and one hand against the wall as he pulls of his pants.
off not of

/and/

. He’s looking down at JC and Chris, appraising them. Not you, C. You’re too skinny for a good meal

You need a quotation mark before Not you...

Still loving these!
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