So awesome! I really like how the repeated sentence beginnings form a pattern that we can start to predict, while their endings remain new & unexpected each time. And how the various sections cover the passage of time, and how each section shows a different barrier between JC & Justin until they're all dealt with, and how the story circles back around through all of those changes to return to the kiss left hanging at the opening. Really lovely!
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Date: 2008-03-19 07:28 am (UTC)