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Hi Terri :-)

read "The end" a few days ago but couldn't respond earlier (new browser is acting up on me or me on it - depents on the viewpoint *g*).

I really liked the set-up and I'm eager to see where it will lead in the future, but there is one thing that bothered me and I can't resist to comment on this.

Despite the fact that I really enjoyed this first chapter (especially the scenes where Blair and the girl are buried under the ruins at Rainier) I wondered about Jim's reaction.

I read about how he and Joel started to look for survivers on their own and I immediately went "eh?"

Well, I can understand that Jim isn't the type to abandon his duties to run and look for Blair, but I would have estimated that Jim at leat would have reported in at the precinct of the CPD. There has to be a procedure for that and Jim couldn't have known whether or not someone would be still alive at the CPD. He couldn't have known whether or not he would have been needed at the CPD, maybe for joining in on search and rescue parties, maybe to give his knowledge about what happened in the part of the town he stayed when the catastrophe hit. He didn't even try to phone in. At least I don't remember having read about this.

Just kick me if I forgot something. *g*

See, when I was working for the government, we were ordered to report in when something *bad* happened. Catastrophe procedure was written down and we were very strictly ordered to follow it, and I wasn't even with a very important department (just a communication departement).

Part of this catastrophe procedure was, to report in when something happened (natural desaster, war, whatever), give the informations we would have and made ourselves available for anything we may be needed for. We were strictly ordered to not start things on our own because it could mess with the official coordination, because we would be needed to do things they wouldn't have other people for and because our view of things/informations would be needed too.

So I instantly expected Jim to report in, went to the CPD or at least try to contact them in any way, to give his informations and receive orders how to proceed or make himself available for any task. I really was surprised when I noticed that he didn't try any of this (or I did miss it - in this case, shame over me *g*)

Well, he could have failed with his efforts to contact the PD or could have get the information that there *isn't* a PD anymore and then continue like he continued in your story. It just surprised me that there wasn't anything that pointed in this direction.

Just my thoughts.

Greetings

Pat

:-)